the face up line is confusing ...are you saying hold onto your hand , fold your hand.... otherwise this is a great piece of writing..I can hear your fear and desperation throughout the piece about being alone in the dark. I will recommend this writing for it conveys deep emotion.

with hold hands looks wrong..I think you should rewrite it

"face up, holding hands, closed eyes." Sounds much better. Good. I like this.

Monor nit, third line down "let's" 'middle of the field"--good, but a tiny bit unwieldy suggestion:"face up, hands clasped" or "holding hands, face up"

"Of vows and bells, Guests and prayer Of blessings and ..." the word rice does not fit in and throws the poem off balance.

i like it!

@Jan-thank you

@All-this part was written for before i went blind i had plans to get married

that's what i thought of right away when i read it. i am sorry things changed for you.

Don't forget the apostrophes!:) Gorgeous imagery: "Run to the place of vows and bells"

third line down: omit