Dazzy Blue Dazzy Blue
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Ageless sweeping wind.Great line

Paul Day Paul Day
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I note you chose to rhyme bend with wind. People are genrally afraid to step away from perfect rhyme and get locked into "this has to rhyme" syndrome. My advice to my students at school has always been "Find the right word before you find the right rhyming word" This is a perfect example of a word that fits perfectly.

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of the ageless sweeping wind. 4 comments


Beckoning come fly with me


the tree limbs we can bend.



As we hoist them in the air


and lift them off the ground,


We can have a jolly time


and blow the leaves around.



We can huff and puff late at night


make it sound real spooky.


Swaying shawdows back and forth


driving people kooky.



When its time to settle down,


the bellowing will cease.


The sweetness of the gentle breeze


will fill youir soul with peace.


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