Asma Ahsan Asma Ahsan
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I (capitalize please)

Asma Ahsan Asma Ahsan
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That's really sad but true. A flirt has been known to target his girlfriends as they are easily available.

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Asma Ahsan Asma Ahsan
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Another suggestion is that you remove the fullstops from end of each line. Leave the question marks in. Put only one full stop at the end of the last line, just to give it a feeling of finality. As each line is starting with a capital letter, one can make out that it's a new thought. Punctuations can be used in poetry, but using them sparingly is always a better idea. Just a suggestion. :)

Asma Ahsan Asma Ahsan
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I appreciate how you listen to my advice. Thankyou.

Kitchera Hicks Kitchera Hicks
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i always love to hear your comments :D

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Why do you hurt me?


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Hurt and confused
Don't know what to do
I know you love me
So why do you hurt me?


Feeling unwanted
You act like you need more than just me
Your appetite is more than I can handle
So you search for more 1 comment


Feeling of uselessness
of pain and regret
My heart hurts and is breaking
You don't see it yet 1 comment


How can I compete?
When I don't have your drive?
Lost and feeling lonely
Why do you lie? 1 comment


I don't like making friends
Because you hit on them
I know you love me
So why do you hurt me? 2 comments


I opened this door so I guess its my fault.
I should never have told you I like girls from the start.
Maybe then I would have you all to myself
Maybe then I could satisfy your appetite and you wouldn't run to someone else. 6 comments


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