Deborah Boydston Deborah Boydston
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The first stanza is a great beginning.

Deborah Boydston Deborah Boydston
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Benjamin, I love the way you have describe the pollination of the dandelion.

Harry Wells Harry Wells
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The dandelion verse is lovely. Great meter and I like the rhyming pattern of A,A,A,B. Have a look at my description of rubaiyat on the improvement of poetry group. This has a pattern of A,A,B,A.

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A poem written in iambic pentameter.

An unignited mass of passion waits
Behind your timid azure-tinted gates
Whose patient, listless gaze anticipates
A foreign guidance to provide the spark.

Uncommon beauty dwells within your shell
No other soul can match nor sorrow quell.
Your intuition wishes to rebel
But insecurity prefers the dark.

The dainty dandelion spreads its seeds
Upon the breeze as nature kindly heeds
Its duty, knowing fortune sometimes needs
A vital push before it can embark.

Beginning with a small but urgent gust
A tempest brews and soon it will combust.
The tumult will be rapturous and just.
Its aftermath will leave a lasting mark. 3 comments

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