Leslie Blackwell Leslie Blackwell
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alternatively you could shift the blame from the bomb to the ones who dropped it. "It was dropped with indifference. Without a care for the life of those down below. If fell straight from hell" Just my own opinion.

Leslie Blackwell Leslie Blackwell
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I would be careful describing the reaction to such a tragedy as fanfare. Perhaps something like "Chaos" or "Panic" would better suit.

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In no way do I intend to offend anyone who was, or who's family was affected by this event.  I wrote this poem in what to me is a new perspective, one that has no opinion of this horrific event.

Slowly, it fell.
It fell from the noise-bird,
Unnaturally straight,
Slow-motion hurtling toward the ground.  

It fell.  Oblivious to all.
Through the sky, to the earth,
to the life patiently waiting underneath.  

It fell. Indifferent.  
It did not care about the life,
Of what lay below.  
It fell straight out of hell.   1 comment

It was met with a fanfare,
One of despair and cries.
The Rising Sun thus beheld
All of the Risen lies.   1 comment

It tore apart, burned,
swept away, knocked down,
And corroded.
what it left was a place,
That war had eroded.  

The pieces were converted,
Transformed into ash,  
And thrown high in the air.
Slowly, they fell.

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