Leslie Blackwell Leslie Blackwell
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The first line is slightly ambiguous as it can either mean that you can feel steadily feel your "heart pulse", your heart pulse is steady, or your heart is pulsating steadily. Perhaps "I feel my heart pulsing steadily" would define this a little better. (just my own opinion).

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I close my eyes and feel the breath
Of life course through my being,
Immersed in tranquil stillness
My spirit is agreeing

My mind begins to drift in seas
Calm in contemplation,
I hear in the sweet solitude
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I grasp here in my silent world
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